TOEFL iBT | Independent Essay | 1 on 1 Coaching | Tips on Constructing your ESSAY

BOOM! We’re here with the writing segment! I’m excited to debut this because I know a lot of you are have troubles with getting grades on your writing. A student of mine had submitted is independent essay, so it’s time to break it down, little by little, and give tips and techniques on how to construct your essay and evaluate how he did on his.

Independent Essay

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of the parents presence and their effect on their children. If I were asked to choose, I would definitely agree. It is my firm belief that in the past children relied on their parents but nowadays they are capable of making their own decisions for 2 reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, in the past there were no sources of information besides our parents so it was very hard to get advice which will help you make a decision. Children had to rely on their parents and their experiences to help them decide on what they want. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, about 15 years ago, I was debating about which college to join so I needed my parents advice to help me decide on which college I would choose, my father started to ask me a lot of questions to discover my interests and potentials and as a result, he helped me to choose my college. For this reason, children in the past needed their parents and depended on them in making their decisions.

Secondly, nowadays the internet is the key to solving a lot of problems and helping almost everyone in different aspects of their lives. Children today are capable of using such technology and they have a huge database that they can search and get information from. Drawing from my own experience, my younger brother after finishing his high school decided that he doesn’t wanna join college and will start his own private business so he and his friends started a small business as they have done their research and decided that joining college will be a waste for their time. Moreover, children today influence one another more than their parents as they spend most of their time together and come up with solutions for whatever they might encounter in their lives. It is certainly clear that children now can be self reliant and depend on themselves.

In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that children in the past depended mostly on their parents but now they make their own decisions.

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